2009-05-18, 03:31 PM
(This post was last modified: 2009-05-18, 03:35 PM by KajitiSouls.)
Sentence fragment.
Your draft looks decent. You could spare some words to describe the school itself and not just the students. Other than that, it'll work for an introductory chapter of a novel =)
Quote:As Jarod turned his attention back to the other students.
Your draft looks decent. You could spare some words to describe the school itself and not just the students. Other than that, it'll work for an introductory chapter of a novel =)